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The Sea Witch
She was but a few feet from them now. Her dress, which looked thin, tattered, and out of place, fluttered in the light breeze.
The Heretic of Ugvar-Zad
The high cleric smiled. He’d perfected that smile. Smooth words, and sweet gestures; these were the tools of his trade. But they deflected off the man of war like drops of water rolling down glass.
Chronicles of the Mask: Episode 5
Operation Nano No-No stands on the edge of a knife, hanging by a thread, (over thin ice!) Timing is everything in this EXPLOSIVE finale to Chronicles of the Mask, Season One. Shelton "The Butcher" Simpson and the Underground Abattoir have one sliver of a chance to weaken the IHI. But war means sacrifice, and even victory brings unintended consequences. Some of those are downright VILLAINOUS!
Chronicles of the Mask: Episode 4
Brooklyn’s nano factory was located in Williamsburg, in what used to be called the Brooklyn Flea. Years ago, the place had been leveled and cleared, and turned into a sort of ugly castle. It consisted of five concrete buildings in the brutalist style.
The Rise
Eli stopped cold. He suddenly felt sure he’d missed something important. Was it the storm three days prior? It had pummeled the mountain with lightning, and rained buckets, but the heat today and yesterday were more than enough to leave the stone bone dry. Was it the Darkness, come back to assault his mind? It didn’t happen that way, not when his focus was this intense. Not when he stayed in motion.
Chronicles of the Mask: Episode 3
The real possibility of being shot, or locked away in something called the Hole, sobered him. Some answer was expected, but he’d no idea what form it should take. Critical Theory Theory was not helping. So, in a sudden flash of inspiration, he decided to do something utterly novel. He would just tell the facts as they were.
A Fire in Winter
It was in the year of the great storm, when the snows fell for weeks, till even the animals cried out to Nokomis and begged her either to relent, or else speak to Gitchi Manitou. Then Manitou heard, and there was a great quiet over the land, though it remained bitter cold. Branches cracked, and fell like icicles, and no one could keep warm.
Chronicles of the Mask: Episode 2
It was all over the news. The Butcher caught on film. A black man in a standard-issue mask was taking out the BS squad, and adding in the grocery store manager for good measure. As he sat there, juices running down his chin, he couldn’t help but feel a little awe at the beatdown he’d administered.
Chronicles of the Mask: Episode 1
The little boy grit his teeth, and nodded. A look of understanding passed between them. Shelton felt something he’d never felt before. It was new. It was powerful. It was danger. And he kind of liked it.
Mirror Sphere
"Hunting," said Sam.
"Flirting," said Felizitas, at the same time.
They stared at each other across the table, while the dark sphere floated on the screen in her periphery. Sam was frowning at her. She frowned right back at him. When he began to speak, she talked over him.
Weaverville
It wasn't true. He was listening. But Derek wasn’t ready to make any concessions. Not yet. He started to say something to head this off, but his father’s expression stopped him. The man’s face was a mask of confusion. Even fear.
Flight Plan
"Is it hard to be a judge?" he asked.
She didn't hear him at first. Her collected courage dissipated. Now she'd have to find it again. The silent circuit carried hidden meaning between them, but he was swifter to anticipate, decode, and redirect it.